Rena0421

Okay, thanks. I was saying that in one place you say they look alike but in another you're describing them and they don't seem to look alike at all. But ...

Same as you, I'm not homosexual but I hate that they can't get married! We should write poems and stories and make plays and create movies about this. I wonder ...

Hi, I agree with Conrad Rice in everything said. You are very good with detail. Seems to be a very strong pointer for you. But sometimes, detail doesn't always make ...

Hey, It was interesting and without a doubt, I'd continue reading it. It almost had a cliff hang-y effect to it at the end of every line that kept me ...

Hey, First off, the way you wrote it was...strange. I don't think I liked that too much. Skipping and double spacing where you thought it should go. That wasn't too ...

I'm back for yet a second review. Like the first one, this was very good. But unlike the first one, the lack of...dare i say 'adventure' was not good. In ...

Hello, For starters...what? Okay, five year old in school and let me get this right, she's hanging out with a ghost? Or is this her imaginary friend? I apologize for ...

No, not at all. I don't like it one bit. Not in a harsh, cut-you-down-to-your-knees kinda way but a don't-write-dumb-short-prologues kinda way. You know what? Scratch all of that because ...

Hey! First off, you completely turned me off from the story by announcing that it was slow to start and that there isn't much in it. Don't do that! Don't ...

Hi, First off, I think you were going for a deeper meaning and understanding? It wasn't touching in any way, shape or form to be honest. Second off, I agree ...

Hey! I'm back for yet another critique. Now, I found a few simple errors in this particular piece. But all in all, very well done. I'm surprised to find someone ...

Hi, I'm Rena. I would just like to start off and tell you that this was very good. It was just as interesting. It was short and it was to ...

Hey, here for an extremely quick review. First off, As dismissal bell rang -As the dismissal bell rings. -You start in past tense ad quickly revert to resent for the ...

Hi Lia, First off, very interesting and captivating. It was a very good short story. Although at the beginning, I was almost wondering where you were going with it all, ...

tip: part 1 and 2 could maybe be separated to ease the reading. Also, your paragraphs are extremely long. Maybe try cutting them up a little? It seems sort of ...