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Interesting idea, making the giant's name David. The story and Iza's relationship with Andrew is certainly progressing well, but I wish you would have more narrative details. Like kitty said, ...

I can't really say if I like or dislike any of the characters at the moment. We're in show-don't-tell territory here. You breeze through everything so quickly, and don't give ...

The grog must have made it to my system now because there was a somewhat pleasant buzzing in my head. I don't think they would use a term like system ...

I agree with you on this being somewhat of a skeleton, yoyo. I'd love to see it with more detail and drawn out more. With this section, I have three ...

I agree with Lynn, to a point. All the stanzas were very different, and it might have read much better if it had some consistency in the lines per stanza ...

Ah, the innocence of teen love! You know there is a reason love stories and poems are full of cliches. That's because those cliches are so accurate. It is genuinely ...

Loved the way you ended this part. It's making me stay interested. I think Jabber caught all the errors I noticed. Though there was one point where you said money ...

This looks like a quick character sketch rather than the story itself, but I liked it. You've got a good balance between showing and telling, as well as action, exposition, ...

Some people say it dragged a bit, I didn't feel it dragged enough, if that makes any sense at all. In something set in a graveyard, you have the perfect ...

Kokobeans has a point about accents when it comes to rhyming. Anyway, I'm in a good mood so I shall not be as cruel as Suz was. It was amusing. ...

This didn't really do much to push the story forward, but that's okay. I suppose it was really just meant to be a section for introductions anyway. But it really ...

You've got some pretty good reviews already, so instead of repeating what's already been said, I'll just point out one grammatical thing in your title that drives me nuts. You ...

You've got the basics here, but as was said before, include examples. I'd recommend doing a little more research, or even quoting some of the research, like how many girls ...

Yeah, this really isn't much more than a childish rant. Sure you have rhyming, but nothing else remotely poetic is the way it reads. And the word retard is very ...

You've got a pretty good conect here, but it feels like a synopsis with a bit of dialogue mixed in. As everyone has already said, this moves by very quickly. ...