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Re: Sins Of The Father Chapter One: The Father, The Son & The Unholy Ghost. (Part. 1)
Overall Reaction: This piece is lush, cinematic, and emotionally charged. The sensory layering (blood/metal/gunpowder/cold marble) is intense in the best way, pulling me into Jason’s body memory and
Jul 16, 2025 -
Re: Chapter One: Rule Number One: Don't Hack Your School Network. Or If You Do, Don't Get Caught.
Oh. My. GOD! This is the best concept ever!!!!! There's only one mistake I saw which was, " 'You need Discipline Nova." which you should only uncapetalize your work. I ...
Jul 9, 2025 -
Re: Don't Leave Me again
This piece hit hard — not in a dramatic, over-the-top way, but in a quiet, emotional spiral that pulled me in and didn’t let go. From the first line, I ...
Jun 30, 2025 -
Re: into the far wood
This piece has a quiet intensity to it that really stuck with me. You start with something simple — someone sitting at a fire — and within just a few ...
Jun 30, 2025 -
Re: Ivana and Peter Watson-Love in decaying hearts.
I loved this! It has a nice suspense to it but there are some edit that could be made. For example, you can add more details like, how the house ...
Jun 20, 2025