RedWritingHood

Wow. That was really good. Quick fix-it comment, about halfway down, when it says DAYLIGHT, you start using commas and periods, where before that you only used periods. You had ...

This is really awesome. My younger sister is adopted so I love seeing other's stories of adoption. One thing, I hate to be the grammar police, but for ""Your good ...

Like @Jazzydracula said, I don't think I've ever thought so much about black. I also liked how you compared the dark and light (so to speak) aspects of black. How ...

Awesome concept but a few grammar errors. You seem a little confused on the tense; you switch between past and present. Other than that, it's awesome. Here's some of the ...

I love all the descriptive words you used, though at the beginning they seemed a little overwhelming. One thing I wondered, did the soup burn her throat? You said it ...