RayquazaKid

Thanks for the reply. I couldn't really do much in terms of action, because for one I never thought of it. And two, this is a slight recounting of what ...

Thanks once again Skins. :) I think it was established during chapter two that they are still in the village, but at a pond on the edge of the village. ...

thanks for the review mate :) WIth the previous ones, I still thing god should be lowercase, as it isn't refering to an actual deity. The long sentence, yes, I'll ...

It's allright. Im late on my reviews sometimes :P Now, I'm pretty sure that this takes place in a period-type era, so why is her hair pink? People didn't have ...

Huh, that's weird. In the original post they are italicized... I wonder what happened between then and your review. :? I also love how according to spell checker, your character ...

Thanks for the review. Yea, I kind of agree that it is a bit corny, but it's really important in the story as the reader can know exactly what Arcadius ...

Thanks for the feedback. I don't know the finer aspects of poetry, and to be honest, I'm more comfortable writing novels. I tried really hard to make each line to ...

Glad you liked it. Sadly, I do not wish to expand on this story, as it is already complete. It isn't meant to be any longer than it already is, ...

Another thing is run-on sentences. Those are sentences that go on where they shouldn't - a comma is put in the place of a period, and on and on it ...

Stuff about info dump Hmm... You know you're right. That means I have quite bit of editing to do.... Taking care not to get too close to the edge of ...

It was an okay take off of that book.... There's a book? He finds this marker and draws with it to get what he wants...okay. You should maybe have internal ...

Myst Island was getting old, as were the four other ages connected with the island. Riven was gone, and there was currently no spare linking books to J’nanin, otherwise Stranger ...

I hope I don't sound too mean... :( Haha, no. You're absolutely right. When I came up with the idea I thought about it from a normal person's perspective, most ...

Thanks for the review. I took a look at the thing you pointed out, most of them I agreed with, and some I changed to something else. As for the ...

Wow. That's just facepalm worthy right there. You made me laugh so hard, I don't know what I'm doing with myself. Kudos mate, you made my day. :)