RandomGrrl

From yoha_ahoy: Questions: 1. Is this post a good length, or would you rather I post longer/shorter segments at a time? Perfect posting length for me. Only take a couple ...

Love love love this! Little typo: His face was pale and a deep boredom only a life of sitting in an enclosed office could bring about was etchedinto his eyes. ...

Brilliant, once again! I loved that you bring Zoe back like this and we meet her again from Daniel's point of view... genius. I think the first half of the ...

Wow, this is great. You have some really strong, powerful aspects in this story, I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it. The characters are very interesting and real. ...

This was completely lovely and interesting. Bittersweet in a way, but still a great peice. Very well written, I must say. Nice work! Only one thing I noticed: "He was ...

I love that this was fast! I was rushed into the story, and quickly got comfortable. It felt like I was right there next to Daniel, walking with him, or ...

True and captivating. You drew me in with the title, and the way you switch the time period (two weeks ago, today, tomorrow) really works and adds definition to the ...

Hey! :D This is such a great poem; heavy, but interesting, captivating and unique. One nitpick: "is the one im living!" Should be "I'm." That's it! RG :D

I love that you have the "quite lovely" at the end of every paragraph, love the whole peice. It's powerful and deep and interesting. You can relate sooo much to ...

I think that, yes, the idea is cliched, it would have to be because princess is displaying an emotion that basically everybody experiences. But come on people! EVERY IDEA HAS ...

Verrrry nice. I love the imagery and everything. There was only one thing I didn't like. maliciousness in his voice and a devilish sense Maybe you could change this to ...

Eh... still has the "Its" vs. "It's". But that's all the constructive crit I can give, I think. The descriptions were beautiful and vivid, I really enjoyed them. Oh, hey, ...

Really bittersweet and intriguing, but so short! I think this would make a great beginning for something you could lengthen... however, if you want to leave it like this, it's ...

I liked the simplicity, but a little... detail... please? Also, first thing I noticed (as in, before I could even finish the first stanza) was the distracting caps. I mean, ...

I would have to agree with Cade that the subject of writer's block is highly overused. However, since you've written the poem already :)... It seemed to me that the ...