Raindeer

Thank you so much! I think that's a much more professional approach to dialogue - I'll keep that in mind when writing. Much appreciated, and thanks again for the review!

Thank you so much!

Thank you so much!

Thank you so much - this is very helpful! I love the main idea of the chapter point. I'll keep that in mind for future chapters and if/when I rewrite/edit ...

Thank you so much once again! I'll definitely work around those awkward pieces of dialogue and the dialogue tags - I totally get your point. Thanks (:

Thank you very much! This is very helpful, and I'll try for more gradual descriptions, as well as clearing up that last paragraph at the end. Thanks again!

Wow, thank you so much for your in depth review! I was really hoping to nail characterization in this first chapter, so I suppose I did that all right, aha. ...

Awesome, and you're very welcome! Can't wait for more!

I'm so glad I could help! :D

Thank you so much - this is definitely very helpful, and the character actions/Lola forging a note point was great. Thanks again!

No problem!!^-^

Thank you!

You're welcome! Okay, I see! (: And no worries, I'm patient - and it's definitely not good to add too much information at once. Glad I could help! ^-^ Can't ...

Oh, and do tell me when the next chapter is out!^^

Ooh I love this!