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RKnight

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Humor Re: Fun In The Sun

    I really liked the idea behind this. It's cute, funny and very romantic comedy only problem really is I wish you'd show instead of tell. There's a lot of she ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Script » Fantasy, Other Re: Rage

    It's a great start! I actually like the suspense, though I don't quite understand what's going on but I think I might sorta... It's not poorly written, or anything like ...

    Feb 29, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Secret Diary of a Criminal (Prologue)

    Wow, this is really well written. I really like the ending, it makes the entire thing for me. I look forward to reading more, though did you ever consider inverting ...

    Feb 29, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: It was only one date.

    I'm not sure how i feel about this. I understood the concept, and I see what you were trying to vividly paint in the readers mind. I just wish it'd ...

    Sep 25, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: None yet

    This wasn't half bad. I was kind of expecting something mushy and just blech, but it was a pleasant surprise. I had a bit of trouble trying to find a ...

    Sep 22, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Please Forgive Me?

    I really like this. A lot. How you began it was great, shugah, very great imagery. The emotion of Alice and of Scott is really real (is that redundant?) and ...

    Sep 12, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: fuuuck this account

    I love this idea for a story. It's so original and yet homey (at least for me). though others corrected your work, I think you might want to think of ...

    Aug 5, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Closer

    It was good- even great, but you were missing some important stuff. I wasn't sure what was actually going on. Maybe start off with a setting somewhere, and introduce the ...

    Aug 5, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Free Anguish

    This is a very interesting piece of work. I hope it does end up in a novel for you because the way you start was just... superb. You introduction grabbed ...

    Aug 3, 2011


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