Kopaka! Dont worry! XD I won't tear this apart!
I liked this. It was short but gave us a really deep insight into the guy's mind. That's only something you can do in poems, in my opinion. XP
Over here:
"But they didn't stop there. It's almost like they exchanged a few words before My arch-rival drew his blade closer to her chest."
The "My" should be a "my", am I right?
"And then...the world stopped when she was impaled..........it's coming.......my untapped power. My captor died a horrible death when I broke free. Even though he was not human he was ripped apart beyond repair."
Over here, yeah, like Zo said,
It was short but I got alot out of it, but the part where you wrote that the captor was dead felt to short. You could have maybe added more info there. Maybe something about how he died or maybe effects of the power , something.
Exactly. We could have gotten more information for that part. And the dots... Dude, it's just three!
Otherwise, I really liked this and I see your writing style as sort of medieval and romantic.
Based on what I read of your works before. XD
Keep writing! And I hope to hear from you soon too! ^u^
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