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Re: high surf ll cliff edges crumble ll never turn your back on the ocean
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Jan 12, 2015 -
Re: Sorry Doesn't Cut It
Listen, I'm not going to argue about it. That's my opinion, and that's why you post on here.. For people's opinions. In my OPINION that makes the last verse subpar. ...
Jan 12, 2015 -
Re: Sorry Doesn't Cut It
"The content is good, the tone is standard for this piece, and the voice is haunting.. so that's all good. What needs work in that last verse is how it ...
Jan 12, 2015 -
Re: My guardian.
I don't like the flow contrast between the first half and the second half. I do however like the comparisons and parallels between light/dark and good/evil and thus her/you. I ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: Untitled - Prologue (Dark Humor/Apocalypse/Satire/Action)
Hey thanks for the generous comment! You're right, paragraph breaks would definitely help me (and the reader probably) A LOT. What do you think of my prologue being too "info-dumpy?" ...
Nov 26, 2014 -
Re: Untitled - Prologue (Dark Humor/Apocalypse/Satire/Action)
Hey, thanks for the input. That's true eh! Nobody ever talks about what's happening elsewhere in the world. I actually thought about this A LOT, and I was actually going ...
Nov 26, 2014