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Re: T*** Patrol
Hello, Fiend! :) I like the idea of this poem. And I like this poem. But I think it could be better. Right now it's just, this is how it ...
May 6, 2014 -
Re: Taking Chances
Hey Iggy, just going to point out a few technical errors for you. In the very beginning, the woman says "How could you", but the man says "How dare I". ...
Apr 24, 2014 -
Re: Better a virgin
Okay. I'm going to ignore content and focus on structure for this one. I get the idea of what you're trying to accomplish with this poem, but I think it's ...
Apr 24, 2014 -
Re: House of the rising sun chapter 6
Hi there! :) I haven't read the previous chapters of this story, but I'm going to review this piece anyway. Okay, so first of all, I noticed right away that ...
Apr 17, 2014 -
Re: Squeak Squeak
Hi! I'm going to attempt to write a helpful review now. This is a very artistic, intriguing poem. I love the way you used a seesaw to represent the delicate ...
Mar 22, 2014 -
Re: What remains for us?
Hi there! I'm gonna review this lovely, wonderful poem for you today, okay? So, first things first, it was awesome. Now, on to business. :) In the second line, you ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: we are the ones from heart to heart
I like the concept of this poem, but it needs a little grammar work. Nothing wrong with that, we all make mistakes. :) Up at the top, that "i'm" should ...
Dec 25, 2013