PrincessOfDarkness

Ahhhh! I se what you mean! :D I shall see to it that it is perfected. Mwahaha. To be or not to be [a coma], that is the question. xD ...

TigerShark: WOW! Thankyou sooo much for that comment! :D It was so nice! Woah, I really didn't think it was that good, but that's just probably because I'm a perfectionist. ...

ThankYou again! Your comments mean so much, really they do :D :')

Sorry about that. When I first wrote it, I had an introduction as to who that was. Sorry I forgot to add it. :( Well, basically it's one of Sam's ...

I agree with SOCKS (xD) and I, too, love the last transition! It was really, really clever. About the tenses, I get it alot too. I mix up present and ...

Well, you now like when you sit in a padded chair, and the air kind of rushes out of it? That what I defined as a "Wumph" noise, because the ...

Thank You Roxy. Wow, I never expected so many people to like and comment in such a short while. Thank you all, I feel all teary. :') You're all amazing ...

Thank You! It isn't- or wasn't- in my opinion, the best short story I've ever written, but it might just be because I favour the genre I wrote my other ...

I think you need to add pauses and full stops in, but other than that it was awesome! I love the fact in turned out to be foodball in the ...