Pretzelstick

I understand that now, but you have to show how shocking this is to Raye herself. Show us how devastated she is, and maybe how she feels that her world ...

Thanks so much for the awesome review! I will try to add more emotions into this and apply the suggestions that you made!

Np, I am happy that I could help you with your story.Definitely shoot me a PM or ping me a notif when the next chapter comes out!

No problem, it makes your work seem neater too ;)

Thank you for liking this story,I loved writing it! I know that I as a writjer need to work on my spacing a lot which I will with your help! ...

Thank you so much Writer,I work on this and edit it until I get just like I want it!Awesome review!:-D

Rosen, I am only commenting, but I loved this so much! This story touched my heart! Keep on writing and keep on drawing for yourself!

That is okay that you forgot, you probably had a lot of your mind, but I wouldn't have reviewed it if not my good friend @steampowered told me that she ...

Okay so Flash, I will explain things later in the book. Amanda was silent because she was nervous, and because she was silent it gives more of an impact on ...

Just saying, this is a comment, but because your grammar is so poor and so unappetizing visually, I am not even going to read your story. Give yourself some time ...

I loved this piece, it totally relates to be, who I am determined to put down my mask!Thanks so much for writing this!

Beautiful,absolutely beautiful inspiredravens! I loved it! Keep on writing and thanks for encouraging me with this poem!

This was great dragonlord! It really describes beauty. you could have made it longer for the same amount of points, don't waste your points

Try not to rush it, I know that you have a strong urgency to do so,but it is unhealthy for your book overall, it doesn't make your story that appetizing!Thanks ...

I feel you through this poem and it totally relates to me!Thanks for telling me that there is someone else out there who feels like me!