Pretzelstick

What if you just showed Phoenix just doing the mission, or reporting to the welcome center to get the directions. What if the first sentence was: I had a mission ...

Please do not write such discouraging reviews to an author.This is very very highly insulting and wrong and bad. There is a real person that wrote this behind the screen ...

I would suggest reading the prologue to get a little more background. It precedes this chapter.

I am going on to the next chapter since you have here about 6 really awesome reviews!

Ping!Here to remind you that you never reviewed the next chapter. ;)

"Like sunlight burning at midnight" is supposed to be there,and I deliberately thought about and described it this way. This is inspired by a line from a song and the ...

"Like sunlight burning at midnight" is supposed to be there,and I deliberately thought about and described it this way. This is inspired by a line from a song and the ...

Thank you and I will make sure to do a quick fix with that nitpick.

Thank you for your review! I fixed that long line that you pointed out by just carrying the "and looks up" to the last line. I actually have decided that ...

Alright, I changed that nitpick and those POV problems. So what I was thinking is that this little girl watches this sapling pine tree outside her house grow as she ...

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Thanks you,this review made me smile :) It calms me down too!

Thanks, I like when my poems makes people smiles ;) I will work with tthe comma spaces(that is my weakness in poetry)

Yes I did try my hand at poetry before, I am acutally doing NaPo this year and I really like to write poetry. I will make sure to actually put ...

I absolutely loved this poem!It was so well-written and because of that I read it like 3 times.I can relate to about everything that you are saying,especially about the disguise ...