Pomeroy

Ah yeah. I see what you're saying. It is helpful, don't worry! Thank you!

Thanks for the review! How would I go about adding more terror to the fighting scene?

The "yet" at the end of "suicide hasn't happened" is a tad concerning. Read that last paragraph for me and apply it to yourself, too, okay? Life is a rollercoaster ...

Thank you for this thorough review!! I really appreciated it. I'll definitely be taking some of your advice.

First off, welcome to YWS! I'm flattered that I'm one of your first reviews. Yeah, I'm skeptical of ever labeling anything I write as poetry because I know absolutely nothing ...

Hmhm yeah. I should probably add a little more so it seems a little more gradual. Thank you for the advice! And I'm glad you liked it

thank you! I'm glad you liked it :D