Pippiedooda

Hi :D I really loved this!! I have hardly anything that could be improved, I think you have it pretty much polished :) In my eyes, autobiographies are for people ...

Hi asxz! :) Really good job here, I'm sure you'll do well in the contest :wink: I haven't read through the other comments so sorry if I repeat anything :D ...

Hi! :) I really liked this story- Its not got a lot of action but I don't think that matters as it describes an emotional moment that is just as ...

Hi! :) I skimmed over the other chapters and I think you have a great story here, the way you have managed to show not only the emotions of the ...

Hi! :D This was really well written- you have managed to show a truly moving piece brilliantly. I think a lot of nitpicks have been done already but I will ...

Hi :D I really like this part- its a bit less panicky but you've still kept it interesting. Its left me wanting to read more! :) I could almost have ...

Me again :) You've managed to keep the thrill factor throughout this piece too- which is hard to do so well done! My muscles were only warming up after the ...

Hi! :) This is a really exciting beginning, from the very start to the end its got my heart pounding. I haven't read every one's comments so sorry if I ...

:D ! This was really funny, all the way through you managed to keep the humorous edge to your writing and I think the ending fitted perfectly with the style ...

Don't worry its not terrible! There are a few mistakes but the overall writing and idea is good :) I think with a little editing you've got a great beginning ...

I found this piece really effective- puppy mills are awful. I'd heard a bit about them before, my own dog I got from the RSPCA and he was rescued from ...

Hi! :) I think this chapter is much better now that you have edited it- I like the changes you have made and how you have focused more on Gabrielle's ...

Hi first of all welcome to YWS! :D This is a really good first post- very effective and chilling. I noticed quite a few mistakes in not using commas, but ...

I have two major reactions here- 1) Brilliant ending! 2) NOOOOOOOOOOO PROCTOR!!!!!!! You have managed to end amazingly- I feel so bad for him though!! I love how you have ...

Hi Rosey :) You have done so many reviews for me on my story, I thought I might try and help where I can too- although this story does seem ...