Pippiedooda

Hi there :) This is written extremely well, I love how you have revealed more and yet there is still a sense of so much more to come :D I've ...

Hi Armagan! Oooh I like this part, loving the whole mysteriousness! :D Lucy has pointed out a lot of stuff already that I agree with but I shall add some ...

Hi KJ! I really like how you have written this flashback- nicely done :) It was as much leash he would give himself I think you need 'as' before 'he ...

Hi again :) This is a really well written piece! I could actually feel my heart thumping when they were running from the Leshy- the description on it was brilliant ...

Hi! :) Interesting story here- There looks like there is a lot more behind it than meets the eye :D On with the review! When summer nights grew longer, crisper ...

Noooo you can't end it there! I hope you write more soon as right now I really want to find out what she did- although I do think you have ...

Hi bekiw! :) I love this story so far- I'm really interested as to where it goes, great ending to this part! I'll go through with some nitpicks then give ...

Hi again :) I've only got a few nitpicks here!- She knew it was foolish to think she stood a chance with him, but he was new. He didn’t know ...

Ooooh I like how this is developing- Keith sounds gorgeous ;) I think you have written this really well, I didn't notice much but I will point out what I ...

Hi Moriah Leila! :) Aww I feel so bad for Veronica :( I haven't read the comments so sorry if I repeat anything Her murky brown eyes disappeared when compared ...

Hi Armagan! I love your pic by the way ;) Sorry it took me a while, instead of doing a lot of nitpicks I will try to focus more on ...

Hi Excalibur! :) I really enjoyed this beginning! His black cloak had become hot under the afternoon sun, but the he did not care. I think it would sound better ...

Hi :) I like this part! I do think you should continue, you've got a good story going here and it would be shame to leave it. I think its ...

Hi great story!! :D You've got a good introduction and a really interesting story so far, I'm really curious as to what happens next! Her uncle had once again offered ...

Hi :) I definetely think you should carry on with this! She was wearing some kind of black slinky dress that basically ended right below her thighs. I'd leave out ...