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Thanks! :D

Thanks I just noticed my typo...grey hears indeed

Ouch. Wasn't focused on the message!

Alright, quoting to begin soon: Firstly about the joke. I understood it, but the pun was not what I was getting at. ...But Ann Bobby had been watching him like ...

What I meant was add more tension and the like to the story. But good work!!

Sure, I'll quote them all ASAP

Story, you are copying AE word for word. That isn't a review.

Oops that was cut. I was trying to write something where a transition would be made between three realities, smoothly without clarification. I don't suppose this is a well known ...

Thanks for the review Iggy! I wrote this on a phone so some buttons I press do not register. It should be "no one is looking over me" Car-park is ...

[Page refreshed makes for form resubmission makes for spam] Sorry about this second post.

There are thee separate scenarios actually. Maybe that's why you were confused because you thought here are only two? Thanks for the comments!

Thanks!

Yup. Cell phone. Call me crazy!! :D

I was an artistically liberated snake. I thought it would be more confusing (read fun) for readers to think this was written from a person's perspective. Thanks for da review!

Thanks pan! Now I know a new area I can work on! Panic description!