Pidgin_Princess

Very cool. excessively disturbing, but very cool. The first few stanzas were a bit confusing though. It took me awhile to figure out exactly what was happening. maybe you could ...

I must agree. Although the information you present is fascinating, I feel like I'm reading an article. And that's not what I want; I want to read a story! I ...

I really enjoyed that! Such a great symbol of growing up, if you know what I mean. However, I will have to agree with Kitty. I think the main focus ...

I really like that! It sounds like a great story. I do, however, have to agree with the show-don't-tell comment. When I'm reading, I feel like an observer, not part ...