Alex DeJule was a very young boy
When he saw his father killed before his eyes
He soon realized that life was not a toy
And everyone would die
Well, “mama” he cried no matter how hard
The dark still shined within his heart
With no help and no life to live
He took the knife and stabbed his chest
He bled and bled on the sidewalk that night
Where his father once laid and his mother once died
And was content that he and his father
Now would have the very same death
He was only 12 when he did this and the paramedics let him live
Being released onto the street yet again, seeing what life is
He realized he was not meant to die but he was meant to kill
He grabbed his knife walked into the night, ready for a thrill
Poor Alex covered by night is blind
Not of eyes but of the light
He walks off into the dark night
Knife in hand ready for the fight
He planned all of the ins and the outs
Of the streets in this old town
In the alleyway he stood in silence
Waiting for someone to come
Cane in hand, a suited man tread across the blocks in dark
Alex, adrenaline pumped, lunged at the figure, attacking like a shark
But with quick speed and reflex the suited man revealed out of his cane a knife
And there on top of the man lay Alex dead in the cold night
The suited man unscathed, unharmed knew of our dear Alex well
For he was the very same man who sent his parents to hell
Poor Alex covered by night is blind
Not of eyes but of the light
He walks off into the dark night
Knife in hand ready for the fight
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...I could have sworn I commented on this...I know I read it...
I really like it, Marc. Really sad, but really good. Man, when you like become a famous singer I get free tickets to see you right? (Hint hint) lol Anyways, I really like it. And I'm definitely staying away from man in suits with canes from now on.
Lots O' Luv,
Lindsay
Yes, it is more spoken word, with backings.
How...uhh...I'm a little scared to be honest. It has a nice way of it, I think it would b more of a spoken kind of song as some areas dont follow the flow of the piece.
I'm sure you could altr it a bit if you wanted to but it's really nice the way it is.
Very cool. excessively disturbing, but very cool.
The first few stanzas were a bit confusing though. It took me awhile to figure out exactly what was happening. maybe you could clean that up a bit?
otherwise, great. I want to read more stuff of yours!
I don't know how to explain it. It's not really either rock or rap.
It's going to be more spoken then sung, I believe.
I like this. You portrayed the character well with the lyrics. I think this song suits well for rock or rap. It has that snappyness to it.
Dunno what you had in mind though. Mind telling us? ^^
Oh my gosh Marc... good job.. I liked it, I really liked it. Keep up the good work... but most of all keep writing. I think you did a great job.
-Max