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Hi Jacob I read your story I really liked it but here are some pointers I wonder if in the first paragraph you could try to make it go a ...

HI Vincent I like your story I wonder if you could spell check your story for example at the start of your story I noticed that you wrote the word ...

Hi Cam!So I really liked your story and your historical elements.I wonder if you could have indented every time a different person talked.I really really liked the story line!And finally ...