PhantomInvader

All right, here is chapter two. --- Chapter Two School: So Far, So Grotesque The first day of school went by exactly as it always had since the school system ...

Thanks for the critique! Most of the unneeded stuff was for the meter/rhythm, though I admit there was probably a better way to do it. And actually yes, she did. ...

I think 'had' should be 'hat' How in the world did I miss that? I checked over it like, four times! XDD who pointed at the front of the class ...

Thanks for the help, all of you! I've decided to put one actual chapter up before leaving it be for a good few days. Chapter one has more character introduction ...

Yeah. So. I really hate the 'this story' sort of set up. 'This story will...' It's boring, unnecessary and takes the reader out of the actual story. I'd cut it. ...