PetalPickingPoet

So I'm getting the feeling English isn't your first language. If so, WOW. I could never even consider writing in another language from the one I speak in. So great ...

Sometimes I wonder what lies beyond those tripping eyes. As I sit here, holding your hands I feel you slipping away Faster and faster into a deep, dark abyss The ...

Your mother, your father, Your sister, your brother, your aunts, your uncles, and all the others. For some reason the rhythm of this last line doesn't click for me. I ...

That sick, twisted idiot that just sits back to watch. I'm thinking I would go with " who just sits back to watch. Actually, I might change the word to ...