Perra

Well, it finally happened that a huge post of mine was destroyed. *growls, roars, destroys things* Stupid, stupid thing! I was logged in on the other window!!! GRRRRAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!

I found somethings wrong, Mesh! :mrgreen: :twisted: And it's not just that it took me this long to find that you posted something here! :roll: :wink: "i hope you know ...

So far, this is the only mistake I can find to critique. He had the eyes of all who passes by on him; he could feel their glares, as he'd ...

Interesting. I liked how you have a murderer with hardly any memory of the murder(and of a king!) as the main character. Here are some critiques; In the shadows of ...

I was about to correct every single grammer mistake I found. Then I read this; Ok, this is a part of my book. I wrote it in a hurry, so ...

This is just as good as the first part you gave us. Bravo and kudos! I do concur, you do write beautifully. The men don't know that Ravin is the ...

I enjoyed this part of your story! It seems very interesting. If this became a book, I'd certainly try and get it! I loved when you told us the position ...

My word that's long. I don't know if I'm going to have time to review/edit/whatever the whole thing in one post/go. I like the way you start off descirbing the ...

I like it. It's just dialogue, and it's just great. Trying to find out what's going on, what happened, what's happening, and who these people are is really fun. :mrgreen: ...

Wow, that was good. And sad. Rape...*shudders* Did you say who had ransacked the village? If you didn't, it might be better if you did... I also loved the change ...

I thought it was good. I don't know how to explain what needs to be critiqued, and I also forgot what needs to be....read it a few hours ago. :D ...