PerforatedxHearts

Yeah, I agree with Claud. But though you need to improve on the writing, the voice was okay. A bit creepy, but yeah. The italics are unnecessary, but i sure ...

Very good; your description and the tone fits the romantic genre perfectly. I likey.

Thank you both! I usually have a better time coming up with lyrics than the melody. This might as well end up as a rap or something. Haaha.

Okay. Thank you!

Yaayy. Thank you!

Hehe. Alright, I'm making a few adjustments. Thanks again! Meep. >.< This is already rated R, apparently. Don't know why. I didn't do it. >.

I agree with Snoik. I mean, I love the description, it's beautiful how you manipulate the sentences in a way that it almost seems like how i write (hehe), but ...

Yay! Finally! After a lot of writing, and a lot of thinking, I have added a new section, I guess, that clarifies a lot about Marie and Becca. It will ...

Ahh. Okay. I wanted "no" as a repitition to make a point, but...hehe. Thanks, you two!

Kylan: Don't worry. I definitely will. I need to start working on my editing things, as in I need to do 'em more often. And I'll definitely work on those, ...

Kaz: Ooh. So I am right? Gosh. Expressions are all sounding the same now these days. AndNeverAgain: Thank you! Thank you! Heehee.

Shouldn't this belong in Romantic Fiction, though?

Royboy: Hm, I wasn't really sure. Hehe. I mean, I was like, "What was it again?" Originally, I had it as "four weddings and a funeral," which just sounded plain ...

Ahhh. Well, I'll take all of the above into consideration as well as taking it as a compliment. Hopefully, it is. XD

Samara: Yes, I am thirteen. No, I am not lying to impress anybody. For that fact, I wish I could be older, since everyone tells me I look older than ...