PenguinAttack

I disagree almost entirely with everything that has been said in this thread. The Hunger Games presents a sad indication of how easily readers acclimatise to airport fiction in their ...

Hey Crim! This won’t be a long critique, probably. I love that you’re attempting poetry, as you did say you’re more of a story writer. I think that you need ...

Icanbefixed! What happened? The last poem you posted was so very eloquent and luscious and wonderful. This, in comparison (Which one shouldn’t do, but does because it can’t be helped) ...

Hi, Icanbefixed! So, I completely love this. Your imagery is wonderful and the narrative you tell with it is excellently done. You’re describing everything that happens with such a precise ...

You know what, Gallyallyarous? I am very, very happy you posted this. So happy, even, that I can ignore that you changed your other poem to this without any warning, ...

Hi Ben! Now, I’m not too great at non-fiction (In actual fact it’s been driving me mad the last week) but I think you need more reviews on your works! ...

Hey Lums! Kyll has done an excellent and clear critique which I have no real qualms with. I agree that the feeling here, the substance, is greatly lacking. I think ...

Lums! Firstly, lose that disclaimer line. If people take your writing literally, then it’s their issue. As the writer of the poem you only have so much influence on how ...

Joooooooooooon. I am very happy to see something new from you! First off, I love the immediacy of this, the short and hard tone and the wonderful feeling it evokes. ...

Hi there! I’m glad you want honest feedback; because that’s the kind I like best. Once I’d read this, and then what was in your spoiler, I had a look ...

Hi Scar! Okay, firstly I’d like to say I quite like your title. It’s been done before but it suits this poem well, particularly as “In” is indeed bracketed into ...

Hi Retro! I’m sorry it’s taken me so long to get back to this for you! In that time you’ve received many good critiques so this one will no doubt ...

I'm not sure how to comment on this, but I really just want to explain who Roland Barthes is and why you've seen him quoted and other things by him ...

Hi there! I said I was going to come back and review this, and I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to get back. I like your story, it's ...

Lum! You didn't tell me you edited this! Why didn't you tell me? It's perfect now. You've hit the right line lengths and the right tone in each stanza. The ...