PenguinAttack

Hi Rea, It's nice to see some work from you, I don't think I've encountered it before. This is interesting. It's a pretty smooth read and there aren't any nitpicks ...

Hi pletta, So I think I like this. I like most of this, you have some really solid, punchy lines that are just perfect for what you're trying to say. ...

Hi CancerousSkies, So this is super long and mostly super boring. There are points of genuine interest, Robinson climbing through the tree in Part One, and some of the chatter ...

Hi ikiru! I like what you're doing here, the simple lay out and the simple words. However, it isn't terribly inspired as it is. When we have so little to ...

Hi Maggie! So vacillation is a mega awkward to have been chosen for you because it's just... a word that I think might not suit your style at all. You're ...

Hi Travaril! So I like what you're doing here, with the elves on the run and humans and the like. You have some words which are meshed together, try to ...

Hi InfinityandBeyond! So I knew this was a religious poem the moment I read the first two lines. It just smacked me immediately in the face and it didn't let ...

Hi Drinkonthemoon, I like this poem, I enjoy the soft feeling of the waves, I liken them to the bendable boundaries you're talking about. So I'll firstly run the usual: ...

Hannahbobannah, You may take my last review before I really, seriously, really have to sleep. I picked this for you to post out of the selection because I, firstly, think ...

Hey Prettyface! So you do have some really awkward phrasing going on here, but it doesn't hold your story back too strongly. The characters are already clear and we have ...

Hi Mihaivisan, I like this, there's a good sense of hunger and freedom at the end which plays very nicely into the feeling of the wolf getting free. I like ...

Hullo Stephy! So I totally thought this was a Twilight fanfic when I started reading - I think it was the introduction of "Carlisle" which isn't a name I'm familiar ...

Hi ikiru! So I read up on the contest and I see what you're doing here! I like how you're using the words simply and without much fuss in the ...

Yay! More! Comments follow: Is he planning to stay for seven hours?! And you've capitalised “Red” for some reason. “unwelcome” would be a more comfortable use here. (Without the d) ...

Hullo! I like this, it's funny and interesting but it also stops really abruptly at the end - were you writing more of this? I also popped a rating onto ...