PenguinAttack

Hello Pompadour! Thank you for posting a poem! I haven't been able to review any poems at all today and I've been craving one! You clearly enjoy rhyme and that's ...

Hola! So, the best thing about this is the Professor Oak bit! Because I read it like it was in a Pokedex and was informing me all about the important ...

Hullo there! I’m going to begin with a kind of comment-as-I-go thing and then sum up at the end. Ready? READY! A variety of flowers? That is specifically non-specific, and ...

Heylo! I've left this comment on two of your other essays so far so I hope you don't mind my repeating myself: You need structure. I'm going to drill this ...

Hola, This essay has the same slipshod organisation as the last one I read. You need to consider your format and apply it appropriately to your arguments so as to ...

Hullo there, This is an interesting form to take on, particularly to mark as an essay. This would be an informal essay at best, as your use of colloquial language ...

Hey! Small nitpick in spelling “I’m glad to here that” should be ‘hear’. “Caden threw up his arms triumphantly.” I feel like you don’t mean triumphantly, cause that means in ...

Heyho! Again, I don’t know why Kira is given so little attention or power here. I know she’s allowed to take the Demis into her power but really she’s not ...

Hiyo! I don’t like this assumption of Caden’s that Kira is too delicate to hear some crude joke on her behalf? Like, she’s said before that she is oh so ...

HI! Awkward change, again. Seriously, why do you think we can follow those? They are so confusing. Secondly, why on earth do they have bright orange war suits? Like, what ...

Yo Whaaaaaaaaat is Shadow doing shooting people? Like, seriously. He could have just disappeared, and not shot the guy in the face, there was seriously no need for him to ...

What world is Caden from? The world of Moderators? Or some weird other dimension because they've stated he looks like an elf a couple times, so. Everyone actually looks like ...

Hola! Maintain the spelling of your names, you have “Sonny” and “Sunny” here, and isn't Wildfire Shadow’s brother? Why doesn't he know why they call him Snatch? Totes weird. Caden ...

Hihi! You’ll get really sick of this, but fix up those transitions! I’m going to mention it in every single chapter because it happens in every chapter and it’s ridiculously ...

Hola, Why is the bolt in his stomach rather than his back? He was shot in the back, pulling it through the front would probably just slice up his internals ...