Pencillia

I like the thread. It reminds me of the thread of fate which couples are said to be bound by. I like the souls traveling. "limitlessness palette" reminds me of ...

It seems a little random, like the words "cake" and "chickens". Are people too awkward in your own poem to restart the conversation all over again? Also, "pet snake" is ...

Reminds me more of a losing war than a losing video game. I think "game" because of the title. A war video game, perhaps? The battle seems to be one-sided ...

Good idea having an object speak it's voice. Although, objects speaking has been done before, you did a pretty decent and bang-up job. Why, of all objects did you choose ...

This is very sweet :) I am sure they will love it. I don't know, though. I don't really believe in fate, but it could mean that of all things, ...

I like the comparison to fairy tales. I've heard that dancing on the points of your feet can end in HORRIBLE things. You're right that most people avoid pain, and ...

The characters have a lot of personality, especially Maddison. I think it was random for Larry to get angry and worried abut Laura, then stop carrying and put his phone ...

I like the rivalry, or rather dynamic, between Benny and Smith. Good dynamics make a story worthwhile. I liked it when Smith as a bit worried about Billy. I find ...