PeanutPhoebe

I see, it just seemed strange that you mention everyone else, but not him...

Thanks for the review!! A little confused at what you mean by "I would like it more if te character's dialogue described Selena instead of the author" like I said, ...

YEAH!!;)

Thanks so much!! I really didn't think anyone would be interested, just thought I would post it since it's free submission right now...About the flying part, the reason I put ...

I know...

oops, i just went back and noticed the part where she went back and got the ring...guess i missed it the first time...

Ok, that's fine....yeah, when I previewed it though it was totally different and the formatting was fine...I guess we hadn't really thought about the English

Yes, much!!

Wow...that's definitely hair-raising. It's a great poem, just kinda creepy. I agree with TheMessenger, tho, stanza three is a little bit awkward. The way you ended that stanza just didn't ...

Of course it would be...

All right my "complaints" and the things I like are pretty much the same as the first two chapters. Flows pretty well, except for some places and a good bit ...

Yup, pretty much!!;)

Ok, I will...I know how you feel, sometimes when someone says something about my work, I'm like: "no, I like it this way!!:)

Great job!! Again, sometimes you don't give quite enough information and description... One funny thing is where all of a sudden you introduce the old man as Burns, when you ...

Thanks so much, that's what i've been thinking. I'm planning on revising it and trying to fix that if i can. No, i won't take it too seriously, i'm always ...