PeanutPhoebe

Hey Malachi!! Here to review... Ok, so I like that you used my brother in it, and the first part almost sounds like a story he would tell after getting ...

Well, ok, it's really a pretty good poem, but the last half isn't really about rain. Also, you have a few comma splices in this. I know, that's easy to ...

Great job!! In some places the rhyming isn't as good as in others, but there's a great choice of words there. I like the way that you got the message ...

Great story, it was really cool how much you worked the mother's love and affection into it. It could have used some more description, like at the part where he ...

Ok, i'm trying to get points, and it didn't give me any for the last one because it didn't think i had four complete sentences cuz of the here it ...

Too cute!! so silly and funny... the rhythm is good, i agree with Liaya...you did good at not being too wordy, but at the same time, describing everything well... also, ...

ok, my last comment was supposed to be review, (i'm trying to get some points so i can post my first work) so i'm gonna paste it here...i do mean ...