Pattycakes

"Katrina you have done your duty, Satan has erected your call. Now in the fiery depths of hell the crowd is expanding. Gustav is on its way, hiding will do ...

To start this was cool and i liked it. I hope this review doesn't come off as too harsh or anything. Well here goes: I thought the characters seem a ...

I'm not a big fan of people bumping their own stories for reviews. If people want to review they will, if they don't they won't. It comes off as kinda ...

Hey, Welcome to YWS! This might be a little briefer than I normally do but I'm tired so... First off, I liked this story quite a bit. The frame of ...

Hey welcome! I know as a younger person this sort of comment is kind of annoying but this is pretty strong for someone who's thirteen. That might sound backhanded but ...

Alright, I always hate it when people review your first chapter and not your latest one. So I kinda did the opposite. To start out, the amount of writing you ...

Cool story, I normally don't go for things this, uh, emo. The characterization between the two sisters is really well done. When Cat knocks on the door you say Emily ...

Short but pretty cool. I'll admit I'm not a huge fan of the opening sentence style that goes "______ was verb'ing'. But it picked up from there. Crouched down, leaning ...

First, I'd just like to say that this story is absolutely AMAZING and I can't believe no one has given you a review yet. But I think there's a simple ...

"She tried not to meet the registrar’s eyes, her back hunching over." -The registrar's job in the United Kingdom is a little different from the job of the same titled ...

Hey! I think the description in this story is really good, I like the way you describe the dance and the cancers physical descriptions and motions. You use a lot ...

The first couple paragraphs are pretty cool, they're well written and gripping. After that the deal with the raven is kinda trippy but I guess I could get into it. ...

Hmm, different stylistically from the first to chapters. Not in a bad way but like, from the first sentence in you know somethings up. A murder huh? That's a really ...

Hey welcome to YWS. I think you've got a lot of imagination but I think the writing of the story itself could use some serious polishing. The ideas you put ...

Haha, well I asked and I shalt receive :) I thought Zoe was kinda weak chapter one and then bam, you 180'd my opinion. Funny, funny stuff between these two ...