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Re: I Only See You In Home Films
I drink alone. Though intriguing as a first line, it only accomplishes being intriguing. It doesn't have much point to it otherwise because you restate it last line (which is ...
Aug 29, 2011 -
Re: Brown
There is little if not simply nothing that makes this special. If you're going to preech, preech without the forced rhymes. Preech without calling this a poem or telling anyone ...
Aug 24, 2011 -
Re: Judas
You know, I always thought Judas was fabulous because he was such a dynamic character. I could empathize with him and also dislike him when he sold his buddy Jesus, ...
Aug 24, 2011 -
Re: sincerity
With Nightshade on the French restaurant, however the importance of what kind of restaurant it is I feel is negligible. It is interesting. It has a Bukowski grittiness to it, ...
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: Waves of Fire
Yes, the three words per line did disrupt the flow--chock it up to the piss poor enjambment your adherence to the three words per line limits you to. severe passion ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Its time.
Hey boo. We need to talk, see. It's about this poem you wrote. Just today I had the displeasure of incredible insult when I, discussing the process of writing poetry ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: False Prophet
Have you read the Passover Plot? Probably not, but it claims that Jesus was a false prophet. That he was a genius young man who "adhered" to texts telling of ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: creeping frost
Must be honest: this poem did not read to me like a serious poem might read. This has the same flow to it as this children's book I used to ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: A Meditation
This is a meditation on your piece. Hope it's not too harsh. This is a meditation... x4. I can only say "how dull". It becomes dreary and the kind of ...
Aug 7, 2011
