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Thank you! This is really helpful. I dont actually have a set location in my head for them, but it's somewhere in the rural north - Yasmin probably takes the ...

Thank you! :)

Thank you! Yes, that's one of my main worries with this piece, but I'm not sure yet how else to integrate the information. I might end up cutting the scene ...

I thought it might be something like that. I'm glad it was helpful! :)

Thank you. Adrian didn't want to hug her because that scene was after they'd drifted apart, whereas in the scene with the skirt they were still really close. And rest ...

That's cool! I'll go for overall impressions and recurring problems then, though there weren't that many. I think I spotted one Louis so I'll be sure to point that out. ...

Hi, Holysocks. I can't review this quite yet because I'm not at my computer; I should hopefully get a critique done tomorrow. Just thought I'd ask before then if you ...

Yes please!

Thank you for the review! I didn't want to put too much time into finding an obvious motivation for Jay because I don't think there always is an obvious motivation ...

Thank you! :)

Thank you :)

Thank you for the review, Dragon, but I did write this piece four years ago haha

Thank you!

Thank you for the review! I'll hopefully have the next part posted soon.

Looking forward to the next bit! :D