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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :D

Thank you! You never know, maybe the grumpy, slipper-wearing demon will have other adventures

Thank you!

I feel like their behaviour is definitely understandable, if not right. Obviously I'm not the sort of person who would ever go vandalising a church, but I get their annoyance ...

I've had that same kind of glitching too - not sure why it does it! I haven't actually read any other books on screenwriting, not in full. I only started ...

Hi! Thanks for the review. Just a few things to respond to: 'Starts' is actually a verb in its own right - it means to flinch, like at a loud ...

I did think it was a long shot posting a script on YWS, as they're obviously not that common here. They're not my area of expertise either so I don't ...

Yes, the advice I've been given for scripts is that you need to give the actors room to interpret the role and make their own decisions about body language, so ...

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I will check out the prologue, though I suspect my advice will be somewhere in the vein of 'you don't need this; the first chapter is a strong enough opening. ...

Haha, fair enough!

That's quite an obscure reference! Maybe if Nayleth quoted or talked about that lullaby somewhere else in the chapter, it wouldn't feel so random. :)

I'm glad it was helpful! YWS is definitely a great place to get more confidence about sharing your writing. The anxiety never fully goes away, but it gets much easier ...

Haha, I'm glad! :D

You're welcome!