Panikos

Yeah, the main character feeling off is one of a few reasons why I shelved this. I'm hoping to come back to it someday, but I'm going to reapproach it ...

Thanks Elinor! Yeah, I'm definitely going to rewrite this beginning so that the off-ness is more clear from the start. I'm thinking it could even start with the grandma's funeral, ...

No worries! I'm enjoying it as is!

Thank you so much!! I have actually been toying with the idea of not revealing the protagonist's name because, yeah, faeries - but I'm going to play that by ear. ...

I'm responding to this really late because I'm a silly, but oh well xD The protagonist (who's actually a guy, haha) has basically just returned on a visit because his ...

Ah, that is an issue! Flash fiction can be really difficult to write. Though I think you probably could still make this work within the word limit, even while adding ...

To be honest, I think the first way to target the pacing issue would actually be to chop this up into two chapters, so the brain doesn't feel like it's ...

Ah, I see. I assume she's had contact with cheesecake before, then? XD It seems an odd thing for her to know about if she's basically just been born haha

No problem! :)

Ah, that makes sense then! :)

Thank you thank you omg you have no idea how happy that makes me!!!

Oooh you're reviewing again! Ah I'm living In the next draft, I'm going to try and go into a little more detail about how degas transitioned from being made and ...

Hi Mea! I'm excited that you've started reading again! I have actually completed a rough outline for the second draft (and plan to start rewriting this week, actually!), but feedback ...

Aha, thank you very much!

You're welcome! I'm glad it helped :)