OxfordandOnyx

Hello OxfordandOnyx here, I'm rushing so I can't give you a very long review... (: Opening Your opening line- "The stars were few and fading...", this doesn't make sense. Try ...

Hi, I'm OxfordandOnyx and I'll be reviewing your work (: You're grammer is fairly good, there are a mistakes but re-read a few times and you should be able to ...

Hi, I'm OxfordandOnyx... Let the revewing begin! (: I am aware you said this first chapter will not give away much so I wil bare that in mind. However, I ...

Hello, I'm OxfordandOnyx and I'll be reviewing your story (: Grammer Yes, there are obviously a few mistakes but if you re-read you'll find most of those yourself and then ...

I really can't say Twilight? Fine. New Moon was the worst anyway. Until Eclipse... Did you read Breaking Dawn? :l (It was the worst book I had ever read because ...

This is a really great poem, the first line really hooks me. However, I see a grammer mistakes. The ones that stuck out in my eyes (and I am able ...

The poem is really good because I think many people would be able to relate to what you are trying to convey. The most irksome thing was probably "How 'bout ...