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Re: LoaMR: Ch. I: Unforgotten Murder 4 (Reworked)
This really is a diamond in the rough! I actually have zero criticism here. Instead, I have some things that I would very much like to praise, since this delicious ...
Apr 23, 2021 -
Re: Welcome to Wonderland pt 2
Heyo! This is shaping up really nice so far. I'd say the best part so far is definitely the opening, it really helps draw the reader in. I find it ...
Apr 23, 2021 -
Re: Where the sky meets the Earth, part 1
Okay, so... wow! Satanic rituals. Wonderful start (not sarcasm, I find this to be extremely intriguing for a beginning). For technical mistakes, there were a couple instances of missing capitalization
Apr 23, 2021 -
Re: Return Of The Heir Prologue
I really liked everything in bold... but are you familiar with the concept of punctuation? The writing in bold is really intriguing! But the rest of it falls a little ...
Apr 23, 2021