Onyxsky7

Hi, thought i'd step in and see what you were up to. I know this is only the prologue to your story but I think it could pass as a ...

Split personality disorder, definitely made for an interesting plot I have to say. If I were to nitpick about anything it would be your word choice in certain places If ...

Hey, this story was very interesting to me. I'm not sure if you meant write it in the present tense hence Alice laughs etc, but I think it would probably ...

Firstly i'd like to say that your writing definitely has promise. You seem to have a thorough grasp of pacing as well as painting a picture with your words. When ...

I liked this quite a bit, Katherine bears a striking resemblance to lily potter with the red hair and green eyes. Was that intentional on your part of just coincidental. ...

This was really cute lol, besides your misuse of tense here and there, it was okay. I would also warn against using abbreviations such as BMG as well as words ...

Wow, hahahaha, this completely made my day. The waiter came and he ordered ten drinks for me, mushroom ravioli and some breadsticks. She came back a second later, juggling them ...

I thought the books were decent. If there's one reason why Twilight will never be as big/popular as the Harry Potter series though, it is this. Stephenie Meyer completely sold ...

I have to say I was definitely surprised when I read this, "Your world may be fake. But What I see is real. I am wide awake." is my favorite ...