Nolan

Wow. This was acceptable. Not great. Not terrible. Acceptable. Don't answer your own questions, it's just annoying. Leave more for the reader to interpret, and less of a mandate. Multiple ...

This was an okay piece of writing. I agree with the others. This is less of a story and more of a summary and/or prelude to a story. You've got ...

This was wonderful. I could see the imagery in my head, I love the vividness of the words you used. Also, the short sentences really, really, really accentuated this piece. ...

Very refreshing. I enjoyed it thoroughly. :D Just, next time, don't try to explain yourself as much to the readers. In fact, don't try to explain yourself at all. What ...

Generally, this was a great poem, there're just a few things you're missing: Don't repeat yourself so much, it's quite distracting. Use more vivid and descriptive words rather than short, ...