Noelle

Hi there! Um...whoa. I did not see that coming at all. I mean, I knew that Asteria was going to drop the bomb and spill Juno's secret, but I wasn't ...

Hi there! Oh, poor Juno! Everything sprouted from some simple gesture Ben made, one that's supposed to signify love. And this is how it all turns out. I feel terrible ...

Hi there! Ben and I spend probably an hour and a half on the soccer field, talking and laughing, waiting to get hungry . I don't think they were there ...

Hi there! First of all, never think that your next chapter doesn't live up to the one before it (in this case, the prologue to the first chapter). Each chapter ...

Hi there! First off, I really like the first paragraph of this chapter. I like how we really get into your MC's mind. There aren't many stories I've read where ...

Hi there! I make my way home, keeping to the shadows. The less people that see me, the better. Though Redreef isn’t as dangerous as some villages in Sorington, it’s ...

Hi there! Noooo! Carsten! D: So we get a lot of information in this chapter. That can always be seen as a bad thing. No one really likes to be ...

Hi there! It looks like I’m going to get lucky tonight. When someone is at a bar and they say this, or think it in this case, they mean something ...

Hi there! making it look like she had worked four several hours in the heat. I don't know if you mean 'for several hours' or if you just couldn't decide ...

Hi there! Prologue To be honest, there isn't much to say about the prologue. It's just a phone conversation between a mother and a doctor. There isn't anything going on ...

Hi there! This might be a relatively short review since you've gotten such good reviews before me. (curse my procrastination) Oh good, Asteria found someone who was willing to plan ...

Hi there! Her face showed an expression of the utmost horror. I don't really like how you say 'her face showed ' here. I'd rather see just you describe the ...

Hi there! Noelle back again for another Review Day review. Woo hoo! I'm all caught up! :) How can you do this to us?! D: Rudi isn't supposed to be ...

Hi there! Noelle back for another Review Day review! I think it's really interesting that there can be magic contained in clothing. I mean, there's really nothing here that I ...

Hi there! Noelle back again for another Review Day review! Aw, no! I was hoping that Axel would win the second challenge as well. But it was definitely an interesting ...