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Re: Harry Potter, Voldemort and a cookie.
Hey! Okay, pretty much love this. Firstly, It contains relation to harry potter and ties in a cookie. How much better can it get? Maybe if it had unicorns...just throwing ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Llori (2)
Hey! Okay, so this story seems good. Just a few things. First, to scrutinize. Her dark , brown hair comma after dark The girl seemed innocent and absolutly normal. One ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Gillia's God 2
Mkay, well, I also reviewed the first part of this story, and I kinda wanted to review this to. :) Now, I was curios and also read, Gillia's God 3. ...
Nov 27, 2010 -
Re: Broken Promises
Hey, RoseGryffindor! Okay, so i'd like to say that this was pretty good. However, I felt everything happened way to fast. Of course, I understand that this is a short ...
Nov 24, 2010 -
Re: Winter
Hello! Okay, so firstly, loved it. :) You used great detail and me want to keep reading. There were however a few things i noticed. framed by your long , ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: You Are The Star
Hey! Okay, so classic song about someone special. From what I can tell, it's pretty good. But, there are just a few things i noticed. my head is fill will ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: Ashamed
Okay, I have to say i really liked this. I wouldn't know what people who feel like this go through, but honestly, from what I can tell, you capture it ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: Dear Friend
Hey. Okay, I love this poem. Mainly, because i think almost everyone in the world has a friend like this. Just noticed a few things. I think i'll be jumping ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: Gillia's God
Okay, well, I read through it, and it seems interesting. I do agree with Nightshade, about how you stated a lot of facts in the second paragraph. Don't be afraid ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: Joy Production
Hello there :) I'd like to say that i think the idea of the poem is great, but I spotted a few things that you could might want to change. ...
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: Ladies In Waiting- Chapter 1
I think that it is quite good, but I agree with Wickedwonder. Don't feel like you have to put all the detail immediately in the beginning and into paragraphs by ...
Sep 12, 2010
