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  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Harry Potter, Voldemort and a cookie.

    Hey! Okay, pretty much love this. Firstly, It contains relation to harry potter and ties in a cookie. How much better can it get? Maybe if it had unicorns...just throwing ...

    Nov 28, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Llori (2)

    Hey! Okay, so this story seems good. Just a few things. First, to scrutinize. Her dark , brown hair comma after dark The girl seemed innocent and absolutly normal. One ...

    Nov 28, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Gillia's God 2

    Mkay, well, I also reviewed the first part of this story, and I kinda wanted to review this to. :) Now, I was curios and also read, Gillia's God 3. ...

    Nov 27, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Broken Promises

    Hey, RoseGryffindor! Okay, so i'd like to say that this was pretty good. However, I felt everything happened way to fast. Of course, I understand that this is a short ...

    Nov 24, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Winter

    Hello! Okay, so firstly, loved it. :) You used great detail and me want to keep reading. There were however a few things i noticed. framed by your long , ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: You Are The Star

    Hey! Okay, so classic song about someone special. From what I can tell, it's pretty good. But, there are just a few things i noticed. my head is fill will ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Ashamed

    Okay, I have to say i really liked this. I wouldn't know what people who feel like this go through, but honestly, from what I can tell, you capture it ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Dear Friend

    Hey. Okay, I love this poem. Mainly, because i think almost everyone in the world has a friend like this. Just noticed a few things. I think i'll be jumping ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Gillia's God

    Okay, well, I read through it, and it seems interesting. I do agree with Nightshade, about how you stated a lot of facts in the second paragraph. Don't be afraid ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Joy Production

    Hello there :) I'd like to say that i think the idea of the poem is great, but I spotted a few things that you could might want to change. ...

    Sep 17, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Ladies In Waiting- Chapter 1

    I think that it is quite good, but I agree with Wickedwonder. Don't feel like you have to put all the detail immediately in the beginning and into paragraphs by ...

    Sep 12, 2010


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