NightWriter

Oh, I see now. This is interesting! You're right about the 'hello'. I would try to make it more deliberate and prominent in its cause if I were you. I'm ...

I know what you mean. It's a difficult situation to do it in, right? A possible place is after 'mud' in the third line. That is just a display of ...

Absolutely, I will read it too! NightWriter x

Thanks StoryWeaver13, That was sweet, not to mention very encouraging. NightWriter x

Hi Annii, Thank you for your encouraging comment. If you could, and if you wouldn't mind, regarding spelling, could you point out what was spelt wrong? I failed to find ...

Hey Samara1carter, Haha, the paragraphs are my downfall. Always. We just never gelled. Thank you for pointing out the lack of description. I'll blame that on the time limit, but ...

Hey cm57105, Thanks for your comments, it was very encouraging. I'm so glad to hear you liked it. NightWriter x

Thanks Puckerman96, I see what you mean about the teenage actions. I think the excuse for that, is the fact that I was going off a teenage story, and there's ...

Hey Stella, Haha, yeah I just noticed the name. Thank you for your review, I've taken it into account. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece, and I look forward to ...

Hey Dogs! Thanks for the review :) I added the second 'terribly' simply to stress the point, rather than 'terribly, awfully' or something. Still, thank you for that. The mystery ...

Thanks for that. Not her dad, but yeah. NightWriter x

Oooh, sorry, it's supposed to be a chapter work! I'll change that :) The rest of the novel is on my portfolio if you want to take a look. Thanks ...

I haven't read any other chapters, but now I want to, trust me! The depth of feeling was great and you pieced it all together so well! I loved the ...

Why is this still up if it didn't upload!! So confused? And I want to read the 'actual' one, too. Is that up? Let me know! NightWriter x

Thanks Rach again! It's true that the narrator could sound similar to the one in Unarmed, but then, I wrote Unarmed at a different time, and plotwise, it's all very ...