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Re: Stuck with Your Conscience
You can see your own heart fading, A burden this big won't leave you unbroken. Prepare for the sleepless nights, sir, Because a painful chapter will soon be opened. This ...
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Re: Red Winter
It’s been too long since they’ve been here. I haven’t felt the blade for longer than I’m supposed to be without it, I know because my cuts are starting to ...
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Re: Battle
Wow. That's such a full-on thing to write about but for some, I suppose it's so realistic. I love how it's all so blunt and honest, such as this part ...
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Re: The First Last Stand of George T. A. Montgomery: Chapter 1
This was such a powerful piece and a really touching topic to write on. This particular paragraph was epic (if I can say that without being accused of slang): I ...
Dec 15, 2011 -
Re: Danny
Hey Leahweird, I loved this piece and agree with Dogs word for word, so really I have nothing more to say. I just wanted to let you know that this ...
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Re: Deleted-sorta
You know, this was fantastic: just a couple issues. Firstly, as great and mildly informative as the dialogue is, there is way too much of it to be compared to ...
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Re: Fair but unfair
Great story, but: *white skin-u girl-u girl-u Girl-u heart-u black-u Eyes-u eyes-u meet-u meet-u My future dark* - the music player played. "Why this kolaveri kolaveri kolaveri di," I wore ...
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Re: Endless Beach
Gosh, that was good. You have a knack for keeping your writing clean and smooth. I like that. I did think, in the middle-ish: “It all makes sense now . ...
Dec 15, 2011 -
Re: Memories Part 1
I loved it, even though, yeah it was short. I'm interested to see what happens next, but not exactly waiting on the edge of my seat for it. I mean ...
Dec 15, 2011 -
Re: David Echoe Chapter 4
Amazing! Really great writing :) The footnotes are very helpful, I would have been a touch lost without them. Just a question: It saw them and let loose an unheard ...
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Re: The Car
Sleek, shiny, and squeaky clean, red and white stripes, the gal is a beauty. Soapy suds are draining down the sidewalk concrete. Her coat is wiped down and glistens in ...
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Re: A short scene from my book
Hey again! I loved this, can't wait to see more, actually! The previous comments are yeah, all really valuable, but remember that this is your story :) You don't always ...
Dec 15, 2011 -
Re: I Love You (Preview)
Fine. I’m done fighting it. I can’t just shove it back and wait for something to happen. I’m done pretending that you’re just my best friend. Because it’s a lie. ...
Dec 15, 2011 -
Re: My Dearest Walter(revised...again)
Hey catslikebooks2! This was a really enjoyable piece to read! What I loved most was the descriptive writing that really pulls you in. It was definitely an emotive piece with ...
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Re: Eight Years Late
ShadowLily that's beautiful! I especially loved the way you flowed your words so effortlessly. It's a nostaligic story, but one that's not sad or depressing. Kind of like a happy ...
Dec 15, 2011
