Nephthys

Hi, this is Nephthys, excited to review a script! You seem to have a great understanding of the balance between stage directions and dialogue that works well onstage- you give ...

Yay! A script! :) Before I start of the review: I'm sure that you've been told this before, but generally it is better not to direct your own work, since ...

I'm back! I'm very glad that my last review was helpful :) “Oh,” Ivy said innocently , skipping to open the door. The combination of "said" and an adverb sometimes ...

Hello, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely story today! :) The silhouetted shape was the only thing moving in the calm of the night. It crouched low ...

The pale yellow rays of the moon illuminate my skin as I sit upon the wall near my home. Lovely first sentence, except what kind of wall? Without any description ...

Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely story today! :) The sun began to rise on an island in the middle of the Janenia Sea. The island ...

Hello, I'm Nephthys and I am here to review your lovely story. :) Delanie groaned as she felt herself being shaken from her sleep. First of all, I can't help ...

Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I am very excited to review your script today :) First of all, I would suggest leaving details such as "dully lit" (is that even a ...

INT. TOWN HALL - STAGE WINGS - NIGHT Thursday 16th December, 2010. Presentation night. ON SCREEN TITLE: Thursday, December 16th 2010 WOW. A screenplay about theatre that takes place on ...

Since you gave me such awesome reviews, I though I should attempt to return the favour, although I doubt my review will be nearly as awesome as yours ;) She ...

I'll give one more suggestion about a great author, not an individual book. That author is Neil Gaiman. The guy's a genius most of the time. He wrote Coraline and ...

Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be your reviewer today :) A glitch in the company’s long running perfection . Awkward. Perfect record maybe? They ignored me; they treated me ...

Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely prologue :) They say that in the end your life flashes before your eyes. Unfortunately, I've heard this opening line ...

Hello, I'm Nephthys, and I will be your reviewer today :) Personally, I was thinking of getting rid of the narrator. He seems unnessesarry. Do you agree with me? I ...

Hello, I am Nephthys and I will be reviewing your screenplay today. :) Kirk is a twenty one year old military soldier in a modern war happening overseas. His wife, ...