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  • Script » Romantic, General
    Re: Winston Tousdale

    Hi, this is Nephthys, excited to review a script! You seem to have a great understanding of the balance between stage directions and dialogue that works well onstage- you give ...

    Aug 5, 2013

  • Script » General, General
    Re: Stay Tuned

    Yay! A script! :) Before I start of the review: I'm sure that you've been told this before, but generally it is better not to direct your own work, since ...

    Mar 15, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Saving Aleogra -Intruders!- Chapter 3

    I'm back! I'm very glad that my last review was helpful :) “Oh,” Ivy said innocently , skipping to open the door. The combination of "said" and an adverb sometimes ...

    Mar 9, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: deleted

    Hello, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely story today! :) The silhouetted shape was the only thing moving in the calm of the night. It crouched low ...

    Mar 8, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Snap Chapter 1

    The pale yellow rays of the moon illuminate my skin as I sit upon the wall near my home. Lovely first sentence, except what kind of wall? Without any description ...

    Mar 8, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Realms & Adventures of the Ancient's Court Chapter 2

    Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely story today! :) The sun began to rise on an island in the middle of the Janenia Sea. The island ...

    Mar 8, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Saving Aleogra -The Trouble Inside- Chapter 2

    Hello, I'm Nephthys and I am here to review your lovely story. :) Delanie groaned as she felt herself being shaken from her sleep. First of all, I can't help ...

    Mar 8, 2011

  • Script » General, General
    Re: Eternity: Part One

    Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I am very excited to review your script today :) First of all, I would suggest leaving details such as "dully lit" (is that even a ...

    Mar 5, 2011

  • Script » General, General
    Re: Actors (scenes 1-10)

    INT. TOWN HALL - STAGE WINGS - NIGHT Thursday 16th December, 2010. Presentation night. ON SCREEN TITLE: Thursday, December 16th 2010 WOW. A screenplay about theatre that takes place on ...

    Jan 30, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Worlds of Serendipity (prologue)

    Since you gave me such awesome reviews, I though I should attempt to return the favour, although I doubt my review will be nearly as awesome as yours ;) She ...

    Nov 29, 2010

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Any good books I can try?

    I'll give one more suggestion about a great author, not an individual book. That author is Neil Gaiman. The guy's a genius most of the time. He wrote Coraline and ...

    Nov 29, 2010

  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General
    Re: The Robot Project (1.2)

    Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be your reviewer today :) A glitch in the company’s long running perfection . Awkward. Perfect record maybe? They ignored me; they treated me ...

    Nov 28, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Arms Of Death [Prologue]

    Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely prologue :) They say that in the end your life flashes before your eyes. Unfortunately, I've heard this opening line ...

    Nov 27, 2010

  • Script » General, General
    Re: Misunderstood Act 1 Scene 1

    Hello, I'm Nephthys, and I will be your reviewer today :) Personally, I was thinking of getting rid of the narrator. He seems unnessesarry. Do you agree with me? I ...

    Nov 27, 2010


  • Hello, I am Nephthys and I will be reviewing your screenplay today. :) Kirk is a twenty one year old military soldier in a modern war happening overseas. His wife, ...

    Nov 27, 2010


For in everything it is no easy task to find the middle ... anyone can get angry—that is easy—or give or spend money; but to do this to the right person, to the right extent, at the right time, with the right motive, and in the right way, that is not for everyone, nor is it easy; wherefore goodness is both rare and laudable and noble.
— Aristotle