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Re: The WIT - Chapter 1
I love your writing style with a passion. Your main character is on point and his friend as well. I can easily guess the age group. The setting is explained ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: Heaven and Hell chapter one
Okay hmm. You need a better hook. For the first paragraph, it is very repetitive and lacks feeling from each of the senses other than "touch." The male character seems ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: Casual Appearances
This is ridiculously short. You don't have much of a hook and I really don't know the main character or any information about anything that's happening other than the setting. ...
Jun 15, 2014