Necromancer14

This was really good! Like the last chapter, it was a nice, smooth read. I like the idea of animals playing Mario Kart, boasting when they win. "Treego turned back ...

Hilarious! I love the humor. I like the way you make it so that the guy is telling it as he goes, like he can't go back and fix stuff. ...

Haha, this was hilarious. I like the theme, and you did it really well. "I tapitty tap my pen as the teacher drones on. Something about using weed killer in ...

hello, I really like this. It pulls you in and you read it to the end. You get curious about the strange zoo and it's talented animals, and you find ...

Hello, This was an excellent poem, good job! I like your homonym, "depresso espresso" it was perfect. Here's just a few grammar/spelling mistakes you did: "and your free to like ...

This is seriously depressing and emotional. "Always thinking driving north will freeze the reality burning inside me But I guess I don't drive far enough" I really like this part, ...

Wow. I was not expecting that. This was so sick... it was really disturbing, which makes it perfect for the horror genre. Even though there was nothing super creepy, and ...

I see what you mean about how it doesn't quite draw readers in. I think it's because nothing really happens; it's just a guy who plays poker and always wins. ...

This a very interesting start. It has a genius hook to get you interested once you start reading, and it sustains your interest through the whole thing. Also, I like ...