Navita

I think it's cliche because it's so true...from the first few lines, I could already see where it was going. Put in an element of surprise. Add in the unexpected. ...

Well, having been to India myself, I can certainly see where you are coming from! It is so true, and the harsh reality of it is frightening, and very cliche, ...

Definitely sounds intriguing...what do you do when you get stuck in the forest? How do you cope? I love the concept of it. Putting that particular section of your first ...

I agree - slight cliche of Once upon a Time is what draws us in, and ultimately, if overused, will draw us out again. I think you're really on to ...

Short and sweet - I agree with perdido, that it needs to be ever-so-slightly reworked here and there for a bit more polishing, but otherwise very nice. Yes, I, too ...