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Re: The End - prologue
I'm not quite sure I get it. What I think is going on is there is a bunch of aliens who are going to invade earth, and somehow kill all ...
Jul 10, 2008 -
Re: Chapter One - Please Don't Rest Tonight
Wow, brilliant. I have always thought schizophrenia was an interesting plot device. Actually I think you have inspired me for something to write. Anyways. Probably my biggest problem in this ...
Jul 10, 2008 -
Re: The Storybook Chapter One
So far, I like it a lot. Two things struck me as odd. First when you described the rain as salty. Maybe it is a Seattle thing, but salty rain ...
Jul 10, 2008 -
Re: For Your Pleasure
Very interesting. I'm not sure if, as the last reviewer called it, the sociology would work. The revolution that is. The 'Me Doctrine' seems a bit... unrealistic? shocking? But I ...
Jul 9, 2008 -
Re: Triple Point - Segment 1
First let me say that overall I like the feel of the story. I don't have a lot to add to the other commenter, but I can put in my ...
Jul 7, 2008